Sunday, December 5, 2010

Feeling this Way Revised

 Where do I begin, what do I say

It gets pretty confusing, when you’re feeling this way
I feel miserable and stressed out,
I want to break out.
I need to feel free, but it’s hard feeling this way
I don’t know whether to cry or fake a smile
I could make it worth all my while.
Voices inside my head tell me everything will be alright
However I know in my heart it won’t be.
I know I am strong, and I don’t like to feel wrong
I just don’t feel like I belong.
I feel like a stranger in my body.
I don’t know who I am anymore or
The person I have become.
I don’t like change and everything around
Be seems to be changing.
There’s nothing I can do or say
I all know is that it’s just so hard feeling this way.

4 comments:

  1. I like the emotions and expression of sadness but if I were you I would add more feelings and comparisons to this poem.

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  2. This poem represents hopelessness, and shows a lot of sadnesss i agree with vtyulpina though more emotions and visual images need to be shown to make the poem stronger

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  3. there are a lot of emotions in this poem and they are conveyed powerfully. images would convey them nicely as well.

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  4. pretty good just missing a few aspects as all when like u could of used like more words that expressed your feelings; imagery words

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